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Submitted: January 23
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Desirae and Dezarae Lineartby *His-Cherokee-Maiden

Digital Art / Drawings / People

This is for my new sis

She can color this if she wants to.

Critique by =kondouyumi-tan Mar 9, 2013, 8:39:48 AM

Critique time!
First off, this is pretty good, especially since it's just a line art, many aspects of a critique don't fit since it is just lines, so i'll focus mainly on lineart, form, anatomy, impact/originality.

okidoke, your lineart is pretty sound, but i would suggest varying the lines so that you can give the illusion of depth, instead of having the characters look flat, which is a little bit of a problem right now. it would be useful in places where there's deeper indentations, i.e. under the arms, in clothing folds, and under the chin. and remember, a little goes a long way!

Now on to form and anatomy. Your anatomy is very good all around. I would say that the breasts might be a little too large for the frame, this might be fixed by slightly widening the midsection/stomach, i feel like the waist is a little to hourglass like for such curvaceous figures

However, you still do an excellent job keeping things in proportion, they look like believable human beings (as opposed to looking like someone whose organs are missing, or would fall over with the weight of their boobs.

The collar bones are especially lovely, you did a nice job with that.
As the artist before me said, i feel like the faces are slightly (only slightly) off, but otherwise nice job with those too, i know that profiles are especially hard (they kill me

The folding in the clothes is good, nicely spread out, and the character designs are cute as well. Nice job, i only noticed minor little things that you could easily fix. Great job, keep up the good work! I hope my critique was a help to you!

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Critique by ~changruth101 Feb 7, 2013, 4:29:12 AM

This is a really cute picture! I also love the their hair, it looks really good. The clothes have a fair number of wrinkles on it and it doesn't look as if you overdid it. The anatomy of the two girls are also quite good, but I had to look twice at the heads. The girl's head on the right looks fine, but the one on the left looks a little too small. I feel as if her forehead is pushed too far in. Usually, the forehead would line up to the tip of the nose.
Still, very cute picture! Keep up the good work!